Miss Slade

I love it, but somehow... when I finished I pictured your world as like... a 'My Little Pony' world... But, it's still very good! [quote]In your world, which you create ...

I agree with Jiggity, this should be moved to Narrative Poetry. All in all, this was a very good read and once it was done and I read that line ...

Hmmmm... I think you have the same problem with writing poetry as I do, because I see no feeling or emmotion behind any of this. From what I read, you ...

The poem seems tight and as if it was rushed through. Try reading it alloud(so spelled that wrong...) it always sounds better hearing instead of reading it, but either way ...

Hmmm... Very nice poem you have here Wise! For some reason that I just can't put my finger on... chiseled in in the first stanza seems as if it is ...

Isn't the boy's name Peeta? *goes off into book, digs under mounds of junk until she locates it...* Yuppers, his name is Peeta and he is the baker's son there ...

Absolutley loved this, the ryhming was good but I think puncuation at the end and using more commas would deffenetly help with the flow of the poem. They turned to ...

I am the Sun And you are the Moon. I only see you rarely, But hope to see you soon. this first sentence caught my attention right away and I ...

Okay I'd actually have to say that this is actually one of the better Twilight fanfics I've read off of the internet, but still, in my opinion I hardly see ...